Post by Admin on Nov 11, 2016 0:24:46 GMT
I finally took time to read it. I loved it. I did find a couple of typos but before I point those out I want to tell you my favorites. I loved the Black and White story. Truly didn't see the twist coming and I laughed out loud. My second favorite was your pumpkin story. What an unusual story. And so intriguing. It held all kinds of thought provoking ideas as I read it. It could have easily been a longer story but if it had been, I think it would have lost its punch. Loved, loved, loved it. I wrote a short review and gave the book 4 stars. I never give 5's. I always think the story could be better so a 4 from me is high praise.
The first typo I found was in story #1. Last page and it jerked me right out of the story when I should have been most captivated. It's an editing thing. You meant, (I think) Were you talking to someone? and you wrote "Where your talking to someone?" Its possible a causal reader might have just read what you meant and it wouldn't have stopped them but it pulled me out.
There was another place in a different story where you had two words together and only needed one. I'm not going to hunt for it because I truly think most readers would just pass over it. But the last one I saw bothers me, just a tiny bit, because I'm not sure if you meant it to be there.
Your title at the front says: Blake and White. I thought, going into the story, that you meant to title it with Blake in there. But the title on the story itself is Black and White. So I'm not sure which one you meant it to actually be. BTW, that particular story utterly delighted me.
The first typo I found was in story #1. Last page and it jerked me right out of the story when I should have been most captivated. It's an editing thing. You meant, (I think) Were you talking to someone? and you wrote "Where your talking to someone?" Its possible a causal reader might have just read what you meant and it wouldn't have stopped them but it pulled me out.
There was another place in a different story where you had two words together and only needed one. I'm not going to hunt for it because I truly think most readers would just pass over it. But the last one I saw bothers me, just a tiny bit, because I'm not sure if you meant it to be there.
Your title at the front says: Blake and White. I thought, going into the story, that you meant to title it with Blake in there. But the title on the story itself is Black and White. So I'm not sure which one you meant it to actually be. BTW, that particular story utterly delighted me.
